Edits Coding

BLUE is changes directly from my beta, shri_tal

RED is others feedback and things I found on my own

YELLOW is things I changed after reviewing my beta's comments, but are not direct suggestions

Thursday, April 21, 2011

Painful Memories 1/1

Ratings: MC, IV,  MS,  Implied SV, MHC




“Julian, stop.” Elim whispers.

“Ummm.” Julian’s mouth is full at the moment.

“Stop.” Sincerely spoken.

“I thought you liked that. What’s wrong?” He can feel the body below him quivering.

Julian leans down and holds Elim comfortingly. He can feel his partner's scar against his temple as he whispers into Elim’s ear. “It’s okay. I’m here for you.”

This still happens occasionally, even after all these years. Julian is attentive and caring, holding his love as the man cries silently.

He curses for the millionth time the one that could turn pleasure into so much pain.

“You're safe.” 


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I acknowledge that Elim Garak, Julian Bashir, Cardassia, etc. are the property of either Paramount or CBS, not entirely sure which due to the changes in 2006. The story is however mine, and done solely for entertainment purposes.

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