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Thursday, June 16, 2011

Competition (Part 13 of the Drabble Series)


Ratings: MC, MHS

Set During: Season 1 Episode 8 “Dax”

            Garak was beginning to think of Jadzia as his competition. The dear Doctor insisted in his infatuation with her. He spent hours in her company attempting to seduce her. It would have been quite humors to watch if Garak wasn’t concerned about loosing his only company on the station.
            Really it was the Dax part that Garak worried about. Multiple lifetimes worth of interesting stories could keep the good Doctor’s attention for decades. Even Garak the supposed spy could compete. And, of course, Jadzia had the looks to keep his baser emotions on fire.
            But, the most recent event surround Jadzia Dax didn’t seem to be as wonderful as the Doctor had expected. In the beginning he seemed to enjoy the trial well enough. It appealed to his desire to be the hero. He struggled to protect the innocent young woman accused of another’s crime. But, it seemed he’d learned a bit more than he wanted about one of Jadzia’s previous hosts.
            He was still interested with Jadzia for sure. However, it seemed that he was having trouble reconciling the host’s actions with his own image of Jadzia. Perhaps in the end Jadzia’s openness about her past would be what gave Garak his chance. He knew better than to expose too much of what he had been knew that too much familiarity was a bad thing.
            Familiarity bred friendship more often than not. If he just sit back and wait Julian and Jadzia would learn enough about each other. Then Julian’s interest in her would wane. They would be close friends, but Julian would need more interesting companions to stimulate his thirst for knowledge. Garak could wait. After all, where would he go? 


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I acknowledge that Elim Garak, Julian Bashir, Cardassia, etc. are the property of either Paramount or CBS, not entirely sure which due to the changes in 2006. The story is however mine, and done solely for entertainment purposes.



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